The indignities of it all!
				MST review
				    by
				   VGAP

	I know that a lot of you must be tired of usual disclaimers, but
nevertheless I somehow feel obliged to say it...... *DEEP BREATH* This
story was not meant for a profit. All the characters belong to
respective owners. This was written without anybody's permission, but
the author claims no responsibility nor copyright. This can be
distributed freely, but it is not to be used outside of nonprofittable
entertainment. There, you can all unplug your ears now.....
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	Ah, MST review... Always wanted to do one of these neat things. If
I DON'T get a good response, I will STILL write it! Hehehe...
	Since this features characters from several series, some of them
are undeniably out of character and may even have a relationship between
them. All I can say is visit my Church of Crossover Couples at
<http://www.fortunecity.com/marina/thunder/181/ccc.html>. Yes, this is a
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	Enough rambling, let's start the story!



		MST of "Boy Meets Girls" by Julian Soullard
				Part 7 of 8



	Ranma returned to the theater, back in his true form, to see his
two most persistent "girlfriends" missing. "Hey, where are Usagi and
Hikaru?"
	"Both of them got up abruptly and left." Goku replied. "I hope
they get back soon, the fic is about to continue."
	Cloud smirked. "Whatever it is, it sure will be fun."
	"Damn you." Ranma grit his teeth.
	Cloud was about to answer when the door to the theater opened
again. In stepped a figure that caused Cloud to snort, Goku to blink,
and Ranma to sweat nervously.
	Usagi sauntered in a seductive manner, having gained much practice
in zillions of lemon fanfics she had starred in. Her black bunny suit
emphasized her figure quite nicely, revealing just the right amount of
skin. The net hose made a nice accessory for her long, smooth legs.
	Ranma swallowed his breath. It wasn't the amount of exposure that
affected him, as he had been approached by too many sexy women that he
had a high tolerance against eroticism. But this... This experienced
yet innocent temptation was just so CUTE!
	Cuteness is one of the few weaknesses Ranma has. On the second
thought, let's scratch out "few".
	Ranma tried to regain his composure. "Uh... Usagi, what-why are
you wearing THAT?"
	Usagi smiled her special smile #32: turn-Ranma-into-a-jelly-smile.
"I thought we could do something more entertaining..."
	Ranma gulped. "Now, now, Usagi-chan, we are in a middle of a
job..."
	Usagi smiled even wider. "Oh, don't worry. I have got a BETTER
job for you." She started to promenade leisurely toward her prey,
freezing him with pleasant trepidation.
	The spell was broken when she slipped on a banana peel and fell
down.
	"Hikaru, when did you get here?" Goku asked.
	"Hikaru?" Ranma turned around to see his other prospective lover
in an elegant red dress that complimented her well. She was also
carrying a fruit basket.
	"Let's eat something more healthy, Ranma. Junk food isn't good for
you." Hikaru said in her best Kasumi impression.
	Despite himself, Ranma smiled in relief and gratitude. "Thanks."
	Usagi sprang back up, sporting a nice lump on her forehead. Her
earlier atmosphere of glamour was gone completely. How dare she ruin her
grand plan to shoot two birds with one stone?! "Why you pyromaniac!"
	"Tyrant." Hikaru responded in an equally sugary tone.
	Ranma munched on an apple and tried to ignore the endless
cat-fight he had heard too many times before. He was secretly grateful
for that they made him feel like a male; the fact that both of them
meant to do so went completely over his head.
	The timer finished its counting, and the fanfic resumed...

>Dragon ball Z/Sailor Moon fanfic.
>
>"Boy meets girls"
>
>By Julian Soullard (e-mail: jnsoullard@hotmail.com)
>

Cloud: As usual, we are skipping the disclaimers.

>----------------------------------------------------------------------
>------------------------------------------------------------
>
>	AND NOW ON WITH....
>
>	Chapter 7: Daydreams & Nightmares.
>
>
>"Sailor Moon, look out!" Sailor Mars yelled at her.

Goku: YES! An action scene from the beginning! Woohoo!

>
>The monster launched itself towards Sailor Moon as it tried to bit her

Cloud: "Bite" needs to be in present tense.

>with its long fangs. Sailor Moon dodged the bite and rolled back to
>safety. A fraction of seconds later, Sailor Venus and Jupiter made a

Cloud: "Second" needs to be in singular form.

>combine attack on their opponent. A yellow beam surrounded by
>electricity struck the creature sending it back against a wall. 
>
>[These girls are getting better each day.] Trunks thought as he watched
>them from the shadows.

Hikaru: Sailor Sluts getting better? No way.
Usagi: Who are you to talk?
Goku: Quiet down, girls.

>
>He stood there hidden on top of a building dressed in his Super Saya-
>man costume. When he finished dressing up ready to face the creature
>the Senshi were already fighting the menace. He didn't interfere
>however, the Senshi *were* after all the protectress of Tokyo, they
>were learning to team up and take care of their enemies using a more
>strategic approach. Trunks looked after them during each battle of
>course, he didn't have to interfere as often as before though, they
>were all improving considerably with each challenge that appeared and
>didn't needed his help as much as before. 

Hikaru: Oh please...

>That didn't made Trunks feel left out. On the contrary, it was nice to
>see them take care of themselves. Self-improvement was of great
>importance for a warrior, that's something well known back at home.

Ranma: Oh yeah? What about the fact that you, the strongest fighter back
at home, is powerless against the androids? I think self-defense isn't
very important in this case.

>
>The monster held his shoulder in pain. That last attack from Sailor
>Jupiter and Venus hurt like hell, if things kept going like this it's
>enemies would defeat it promptly. It was time to change the score
>board. If this didn't took care of them, it would be the end.

Cloud: "Take" needs to be in present form.

>The Senshi saw their foe open its mouth wide, a glowing light started
>to come out of it's throat.
>
>"What the...??" asked Sailor Mercury.
>
>Trunks saw as the creature prepared his desperation attack.
>
>[A breath weapon?] he thought [I think I'll have to interfere after
>all.]

Hikaru: Now this is more like it.
Usagi: Hmph.

>
>The light from it's mouth became brighter to the point were the Senshi 

Cloud: "Where", not "were".

>couldn't look directly to their opponent. 
>It's adversaries were stunt by the light, it was time to shoot the
>blast. This last attack would use most of it's energy and would leave
>it mostly defenseless after that. But if they were distroyed by the
>blast it would have nothing to worry about.

Usagi: Do you know what? Some monsters refuse to play in our fanfics,
saying that they never get a fair deal.
Ranma: Just like martial artists that don't want to be "villain of the
week" in my show, I suppose.
Hikaru: What can I say? They are hired to be defeated.

>
>A huge pink bast was shot from it's mouth, big enough to dispose of the

Cloud: "Blast" misspelled.

>five Senshi at once. The girls held their arm in front of their faces,
>there was nothing else they could do, the bolt was too big to avoid. 

Goku: How about combining your attacks in one and counter the blast?
That's definitely better than doing nothing.

>
>And then nothing............ nothing?
>
>They could still sense the bright light but the blast didn't made

Cloud: "Make" needs to be in present form.

>contact with them. Sailor Venus was the first to open her eyes to see
>what happened. What she saw was Super Saya-man in front of them with
>both of his arms extended forwards stopping the blast with his bare
>hands. The pressure began to slowly push him back towards them.
>
>"Super Saiya-man!!" she shouted, all the other Senshi opened their eyes
>at that moment noticing their savior as well.
>
>The attack was indeed powerful as Trunks' hands felt it, it certainly
>wasn't a ki blast but could be handled as well as one. His hands
>started forming a yellow aura around them to drive back the bolt to
>it's rightful owner. 

Goku: Why do I have a feeling that the owner doesn't want it back?
Cloud: (raises his eyebrows) Sarcasm from YOU?
Goku: What does that word mean?
Cloud: ..............

>With a large yell from Trunks' mouth, the blast was sent back to the
>monster. 

Cloud: Add a "s" after the apostrophe.

>The creature was too surprised by such turn of events that it didn't
>even had time to take cover. The blow sent it right against the wall
>AGAIN.
>
>The Senshi observed the show, no matter how many time Super Saiya-man
>came to their rescue, it always was amazing to see him in action.
>
>"Thank you for saving us!" Sailor Moon said to him.
>
>"Thank me later," he responded "it's not dead yet! You still have to
>finish it off!"
>
>"Right!" she replied, she took her scepter (from who knows were) and
>began to wave it around to launch her attack (Have you ever asked
>yourselves, how come the enemy never runs away while Sailor Moon does
>all those moves? They sure have time to do it).

Goku: Come to think of it...
Ranma: It's one of those questions you aren't supposed to ask.

>The monster stood up clumsily, the blast wasn't as powerful after all,
>it probably lost part of its strength while being returned.

Goku: Logical.

>Unfortunately, it left the creature wide open for Sailor Moon's attack.
>It slowly began to turn into dust as it's life was extinguished.

Cloud: Remove the apostrophe.
Goku: Over already? Bummer.

>
>Super Saya-man stood there for a moment and looked at his hands. No
>harm was done, it was time to leave, the job was done. He began to walk
>away when suddenly Sailor Mars' hand grabbed his shoulder.

Cloud: Add an "s".

>
>"Hold it, buddy!" she told him "We have some questions to ask you."

Usagi: Uh oh. This doesn't look good.
Ranma: Yeah, Rei has been suspicious of Super-Saiyaman from the
beginning. This could get ugly.

>
>"Questions?" he asked, not really too fond of questions as his latest 
>experiences with his friends proved it. "What kind of questions?"

Cloud: What is the level of your Limit Break?
Ranma: How many fiancees do you have?
Hikaru: What's your magic attribute?
Usagi: Would you like the title of "Jupiter Knight"?
Goku: Aren't you supposed to be giving me a remedy for the heart
disease?

>
>"Well for starters," she began "how about telling us, where you come
>from? You're not from this planet, I think that's obvious."

Hikaru: Wow, a bull's eye.
Cloud: "Come" needs to be in past tense.

>
>"Well I think you're right." he sarcastically replied trying to avoid
>the question.

Ranma: Shouldn't he be a little shocked, or at least off balance, that
she figured it out?

>
>"Don't play with me!" she said a little angry "Tell us who you are."
>
>"Sailor Mars!" Sailor Venus told her "Don't be so rude, he saved us 
>remember." as she began to snuggle up to Super Saiya-man.

Usagi: Modify the last sentence fragment.

>
>[Oh no... not again!] Trunks thought as Sailor Venus started to
>approach him. [Ever since I showed up she's been sticking on me like
>glue.]

Ranma: You have my sympathy, pal.

>
>"Well?" Sailor Mars asked again "Can you give us an answer?"
>
>"If I told you my identity..." Trunks began pulling a grin "You would
>have to do the same thing." as he approached Sailor Mars trying to
>emphasize to whom the answer was directed to.

Hikaru: Is it just me, or is Trunks getting better at making excuses?
Usagi: I suppose he is. And modify that last sentence fragment, will
you?

>
>Rei stood there speechless. He had a point. That only helped in
>increasing her frustration.
>
>"That... that's not the point." she stated a little nervous for having
>him so close.

Cloud: Wasn't she listening to her own internal dialogue?

>
>"Then what is your point?" he asked. For once *he* was making the
>questions and taking control of the conversation. He felt pretty sure
>of himself this time and knew he had the advantage.
>
>"I think what she's trying to say," Sailor Mercury interrupted "is that 
>ever since those monsters have been showing up so have you."

Ranma: I really like this conversation scene. The characters are
struggling each other in a very believable way, with many valid points
and issues tossed around.
Usagi: Yes, it's a nice plot development.

>
>"Are you trying to say that you think I'm involved in all of this?" he
>asked. 

Ranma: Actually, you are.

>
>"We don't want you to take this the wrong way," Sailor Jupiter
>continued "you've helped us a lot lately and we really appreciate that.
>But we don't know a thing about you. That's why we'd like to know
>more."
>
>Trunks turned towards Sailor Jupiter; she was different from the others 
>somehow. He couldn't tell why exactly, maybe because she was the only 
>Senshi that used martial arts during combat, the others seem to rely
>more on their special powers. Anyhow, he felt more comfortable around
>her than Sailor Venus or Mars.

Goku: Makoto's martial arts ability is almost useless against the
monsters, though. The most it can do is give her an edge in defense.

>
>"I see..." he said to her "But I for one don't think that I'm involved
>with those monsters, otherwise I wouldn't be helping you."
>
>"Then why do you help us?" she asked again "What are your motives?"
>
>"I think my motives are the same as yours." he responded as he began to 
>levitate and leave.
>
>"Wait! Where are you going?" Sailor Jupiter asked him. 
>
>"Don't worry." he told her "We shall meet again. Maybe then I'll be
>able to give you some straight answers.[Although I doubt that.]" he
>then flew out of sight.

Cloud: Capitalization error.

>
>The Senshi remained there as they saw him leave. Rei was still feeling 
>distrustful towards Super Saiya-man but couldn't justify her reasons to
>her friends. Sailor Venus approached her with an angry look on her
>face.

Usagi: Uh oh!
Ranma: Yeah, uh oh.

>
>"Nice going, Rei!" she told her "You sure have your way with guys!"

Cloud: You know, that line could be taken in a very different way...
Hikaru: Why can't you keep your mouth shut?

>
>"What does THAT mean???" she asked in a very offended tone of voice.
>
>"You almost turned him against us!" she explained still quite mad "If
>it wasn't for Mako-chan's fast thinking we might never see him again!!
>Maybe you should stop being such a paranoid, that might help you
>getting a boyfriend one of these years!!"

Usagi: Oh no...
Ranma: Minako is entering a VERY dangerous area here. While manga-Rei is
almost like Akane in the beginning with her "I hate boys" routine,
anime-Rei is desparate to get a boyfriend, and it's a very sensitive
subject with her.

>
>"Well that's some heck of a good advice coming from a bimbo like you!"
 >she responded even angrier than before "The only thing that matter to
>you is being close to him, not even doubting if he really is on our
>side!! Some Senshi *you* turned out to be *Sailor V*"

Usagi: Gack! This is getting REALLY bad!
Ranma: I have got to say that this character conflict is excellent,
though.
Cloud: Capitalization error.

>
>"Calm down you two." Ami declared putting an end to the discussion
>"There's no point in blaming each other. We might as well leave too,
>there's nothing else to do here."
>
>Both Sailor Venus and Mars turned there back on each other, if Ami
>wouldn't have interfered it would've ended up in a cat fight. They
>didn't say a word to each other for the rest of the day.

Ranma: THAT wasn't a cat-fight?

>
>
>				***
>

Cloud: Look! It's a level-three materia!
Ranma: Quit making jokes only the author can understand.

>
>She was in a dark room. She could hear her own steps each time her high 
>heels touched the ground, although she couldn't see anything she
>supposed she was on a large room judging from the echo.
>Suddenly, another pair of steps joined hers. Sailor Mars stopped
>walking trying to find out from where the noise came, the echo in the
>room didn't made that easy but she supposed that the other person was
>walking right in front of her. The steps came closer and closer and a
>human form started appearing in front of her. Sailor Mars stood there
>in fear.
>
>"Who's there???" she shouted. 

Cloud: Nobody but us tentacled demons.
Hikaru: Honou No Ya!
Cloud: *BOOM* Ouch!

>
>No answer.
>
>The steps were getting closer by the moment. Sailor Mars was getting
>more nervous by each step the person took.
>
>"Show yourself!!!" she shouted again. 
>
>The walking stopped.
>
>She didn't knew if she did well or not. She still couldn't make out who

Cloud: "Know" needs to be in present tense.

>was in front of her but whoever he was, wasn't moving anymore. She
>couldn't even hear him breath, unlike her who was panting from fear.
>Her heart was beating like a wild drum when suddenly a spot light
>appeared exactly upon her. She yelped in surprise. The person in front
>of her was right out of the spotlight but walked inside to join Sailor
>Mars once she regain composure.
>
>"Super Saiya-man!!" she said in surprise.

Ranma: Saw it coming?
(All but Goku raise their hands.)
Goku: I thought it would be her mother or something.
Hikaru: (blinks) You know, you may have something there...

>
>Super Saiya-man stood there with an evil grin on his face until he
>decided to break the ice.
>
>"Nice to see you... Rei." he calmly said.

Goku: Huh? How does he know her name?
Cloud: (shaking his head) Every time I think you are smarter than an
average garden snail...

>
>"Hun??? How do you know I'm..." she asked surprised.
>
>"I know all about you Rei Hino." he interrupted "I've had my eye on you
>for quite a while."
>
>"What do you want?" she asked in a threatening tone of voice although
>it showed more fear than threat. Super Saiya-man only smile to the 
>insignificant warning.

Cloud: "Smile" needs to be in past tense.

>
>"I want *you*." he spoke as he approached her.

Cloud: Oh-ho!
Usagi: Hey, you said no lemons!

>
>"Wh... What??" she asked while stepping backwards but suddenly found
>herself against a wall, which wasn't there before by the way.

Usagi: It would have been MUCH better if the "which... way" was not
there.

>
>"Stop acting surprised." he told her "I know you like me."
>
>"Stand back!!" she warned "I don't know what the hell you're talking
>about!" Super Saiya-man stopped walking towards her.
>
>"Why do you fear me?" he asked "I don't want to hurt you... I only want
>to be with you..."
>
>"Come on, Rei!" spoke a very familiar voice that came from her left
>side "Go for it!"
>
>A spot light appeared right where the voice came. Rei saw Sailor Moon
>being carried in Tuxedo-Kamen's arms.
>
>"You know you want him." she told her "Believe me, it feels great!!"
>she then began to kiss Tuxedo-Kamen passionately.

Usagi: Oh yes!
Ranma: (thinking) Maybe we were meant to be after all... We are both so
unfaithful.

>
>"She's right, you know." said another familiar voice from her right
>side.
>
>Another spotlight appeared from where the voice came and Rei could see 
>Makoto and Trunks. Makoto was holding Trunks by the arm while resting
>her head on his shoulder.
>
>"There's nothing wrong with liking him..." she proceeded "And it'll
>prove Minako she was wrong. You're not going to let her get away with
>what she told you today, are you?"
>
>Both of the spotlights went off leaving Rei alone with Super Saiya-man
>once again. She noticed that he was even closer to her this time.
>
>"There's no point in hiding it anymore..." he claimed as he started to 
>caress her face "You're such a beautiful girl... You'll see there's
>nothing to fear..."
>
>Rei felt his warm hand caressing her cheek. She stood there motionless
>with a mixture of fear and desire. Her instinct told her to run away
>but she couldn't get her body to follow her orders. 

Cloud: Hehehe... This sounds good.
Hikaru: Well, at least it's not disgusting.

>Super Saiya-man started kissing her in the mouth, his arms held her
>waist. 
>Rei couldn't move or offer any resistance for that matter. He was quite
>a good kisser.

Usagi: That last sentence should have been more complex than just that.
It ruins the mood of mysterious seduction.

>
>"No... Minako... she..." Rei tried to say between kisses.
>
>"I don't give a damn about her!" He interrupted her "Especially after
>the way she insulted you. You're the one I want."
>
>Rei's mind was going wild. Her brain told her that something was
>terribly wrong but her body had a mind of its own. Super Saiya-man
>started to kiss her on the neck when he suddenly began to laugh. 

Goku: Trunks, what are you doing!?
Ranma: Goku, quiet down... It will be all right.
Goku: All right?! Trunks is about to do something horrible to Rei and
you think it will be all right!?
Hikaru: (sighs) Trust us, okay? Rei is completely safe, although I wish
otherwise.
Goku: Well... If you are sure...

>
>His gentle grip was immediately replaced by an iron grasp. The fire
>senshi found herself caught between his arms. He began to laugh even
>more until his depraved cackle was herd all over the room. His eyes
>started glowing red. 
>Rei tried to kick her way free but it didn't work, it was like kicking
>at stone. 

Ranma: Try diamond.

>
>Super Saiya-man's teeth began to grow along with the rest of his body,
>his facial lines started shaping into something monstrous. His clothes
>began to rip. The maniacal laughter was soon replaced by a growl... and
>suddenly, the raven hair girl found herself in the palm of a giant ape
>with red eyes and an evil expression on it's monstrous face. 

Goku: No!
Cloud: Here comes the big ape!

>Another laugh was now heard in the background, it was from a woman,
>from Minako.
>
>Rei stood there completely terrorized, the monster held her in his paw
>and approached her to it's mouth..... then devoured her.
>
>
>"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!" she yelled as she
>woke up.

Goku: Oh, it was a dream sequence?
Cloud: Way, waaaaaay about the time you figured it out.
Usagi: It was a pretty good sequence, although it's not as good as it
can be.

>
>A dream... It was all just a dream but her heart was beating like hell.
>She turned on the lights and went to the bathroom to wash the sweat out
>of her face. She tried to calm herself down. 
>What on earth was that all about??

Ranma: Hmm... Rei's unconcsious attraction to Super Saiyaman... Quite a
good plot development, I must say.

>
>
>
>				***
>
>
>Trunks tried to maintain his balance as Makoto gave him another bag to
>carry. He still couldn't believe that Minako and her could still find
>so many things to buy, they've been shopping for two hours now and they
>always found something that caught there attention. So far, Trunks had
>to carry all their packages. He couldn't even see which way he was
>walking, Minako and Makoto had to guide him.

Usagi: Oh Ranma! Doesn't this bring back the memory of our last date?
Ranma: Yeah, yeah... (muttering) She buys so many expensive stuff...
Good thing I have loads and loads of fanfic authors hiring me.

>
>"Wow! Mako-chan, look at that!" Minako told her pointing at a counter. 
>
>"Oh my God! It's beautiful! Let's go inside." she said "Trunks-kun,
>this will only take a minute, we'll be right back."
>
>"<sigh> Yeah, whatever..." he responded [This is almost as boring as
>school.]

Ranma: Well, at least you don't have to worry about other fiancees and
jealous rivals coming for your life.

>
>Tiered of looking at nothing but the boxes in front of his eyes, Trunks 
>watched around the mall for something different. His eyes stopped at a
>toy store where they were selling the Sailor Senshi action figures and
>the NEW Super Saiya-man doll >>>with sword included<<<. Trunks looked
>closely at the doll and pulled a grin on his face.

Hikaru: It was bound to happen sooner or later.

>
>[Looks like I'm famous.] he thought [So this is what Mako-chan meant a
>few weeks ago about turning into a commercial object. <humph!> It even
>resembles me.]
>

Usagi: If it doesn't, it won't sell.

>
>Moments later, Makoto and Minako came out of the store with yet
>*another* package for Trunks to carry. They resumed walking after that.
>After spotting a certain shop, Minako looked at Makoto with a devilish
>look on her face, Makoto responded with the same devilish look. They
>guided Trunks inside the store to accompany them. Once inside, Trunks
>could only hear them talk.

Ranma: Oh no... Run, Trunks, run!
Goku: Huh?
Usagi: What do you think will happen?
Ranma: I don't know, but I know something disastrous is about to happen.
Hikaru: I agree with Ranma. Whatever those tramps are planning, it can't
be good for him.
Cloud: Well, I for one am eagerly awaiting for Trunks's humiliation.

>
>"So what do you think about this one?"
>
>"I don't know. How about this one instead"

Cloud: Punctuation error.

>
>"This one?"
>
>"Yeah, isn't it cute?"
>
>"Well I don't know, I kind of liked it better in red."
>
>"Black suites you better than red."
>
>"You really think so?"
>
>
>Meanwhile, Trunks was still standing there, admiring the "interesting"
>set of packages that displayed in front of his eyes.He began to ask

Cloud: Space needed.

>himself how could women buy so much. They'll probably only use half of
>it and forget about the rest.
>
>"Hey, Trunks-kun." Makoto said "We need a man's opinion, can you give
>us a hand?"

Ranma: Opinion on what!?
Goku: Aren't you overreacting?
Ranma: Trust me, it will be BAD.

>
>"Sure. [It's better than looking at all of these boxes.]" he responded
>"I'll just put these somewhere else." as he put the packages on the
>floor.

Usagi: Remove the last sentence fragment.

>
>As soon as the boxes were laid on the floor he turned towards Makoto.
>He was quite surprised when he saw her holding a black silk bra in
>front of him. That's when it hit him. 
>He was in a lingerie shop!! The place in anime forbidden to men!!

Ranma: SEE!? SEE!?!
Cloud: BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Hikaru: (furiously) YOU WHORES!! HOW DARE YOU DO THAT TO A GENTLEMAN
LIKE TRUNKS!?!
Usagi: Great thinking, Makochan!
Goku: What's a lingerie?
(Massive facefaults.)

>
>"Where... Where..." he asked "WHERE ON EARTH DID YOU BRING ME???"

Goku: I don't see what's the big fuss...
Cloud: Just shut up.

>
>Timing would probably be Trunks worst enemy, because at that precise

Cloud: Add "'s".

>moment, Usagi and Ami were passing next to the store.
>
>"Oh my!" Ami exclaimed "Isn't that Trunks over there?"
>
>"Yeah, it is him." Usagi responded "What is he doing in a lingerie
>store??"

Hikaru: Being a victim of a nefarious plan by your incompetent allies,
that's what!

>
>"Oh my God! Look at what Mako-chan is showing him!" she pointed out to
>the black silk bra (which was very reveling I must add!)

Cloud: "Revealing" misspelled.

>
>"A bra??" Usagi asked "You don't think that they've already..."
>

Cloud: Hehehe... I LOVE this scene!
Ranma: Well, as much as I feel Trunks's pain, I gotta agree it's really
funny.

>
>Trunks stood there paralyzed, all the women at the shop were staring at
>him with that *What is this pervert doing in here?* look on there faces

Cloud: "Their", not "there".

>except for Makoto and Minako who were laughing their lungs out. It was
>funny to tease him once in a while. 

Usagi: It would have been better to phrase the last sentence as
Makochan's thought.

>
>Usagi and Ami walked next to him giving him the same guilty look the
>other females were.

Usagi: "Guilty"? Don't you mean accusatory?
Cloud: "Looks" needs to be in plural form.

>
>"Trunks! WHAT are you doing here???" Usagi asked him.
>
>"Do you want people to think you're a pervert?" Ami added.
>
>"But I... but I... but I... but I..." he tried to explain "I didn't...
>I mean... they were... I mean... both of them..."
>
>"There, there, Trunks." Minako said patting him on the shoulder once
>she stopped laughing "It was only a joke. Nothing to get upset about."

Hikaru: NOTHING!? How low can you get!?
Ranma: Hikaru, calm down. Sooner or later, a guy always gets humiliated
in a fanfic.
Hikaru: Still...

>
>"<humph!>Some joke." he replied a little angry. 

Hikaru: Blast them into tiny bits!
Goku: I have never seen her so angry... Guess she's the type to be
extreme.

>
>"We're sorry, okay?" Minako told him "But there is something you
>haven't told us."
>
>"What is it?" 
>
>"You never told us which one looked better." she said pointing out at
>two bras Makoto was holding. Trunks began to blush.
>
>"HOW SHOULD I KNOW???" he yelled.
>

Cloud: Well, the red one has a lace in it, but the black one seems to
be of a better quality. Then again, neither of them are Makoto's color,
so I suggest this green leather gear with...
Ranma: (whapping Cloud) Nobody's interested!

>
>After that little scene at the lingerie store, Trunks and the four
>girls walked towards Hikawa temple to meet with Rei. Trunks was now
>caring Ami's and Usagi's stuff as well as Makoto's and Minako's. His

Cloud: "Carrying", not "caring".

>bad temper finally cooled away, he was happy enough to get out of that
>mall from hell. 
>Once at the temple, they saw Rei sweeping the floor with a broom.
>
>"Hi, guys." she said, she then noticed a familiar pair of legs under a
>pile of packages "Is that Trunks over there?"
>
>"Hi, Rei." said a voice underneath the boxes.
>
>"Hi, Trunks." she answered "Why don't you go and put all that stuff
>over there, you must be dead tiered."

Cloud: "Tired" misspelled.

>
>The purple hair boy went at the back of the temple to leave all of the

Cloud: "Haired", not "hair".

>girls' stuff. Meanwhile, back with the girls, Rei and Minako were still
>upset about yesterday's insults, they weren't talking to each other. 

Goku: I wonder who would win in a fight between Sailor Venus and Sailor
Mars?
Ranma: Depends on which one the author prefers.

>
>"Come on you, girls." Usagi insisted "Couldn't you just forget about 
>yesterday?" 

Cloud: Not a chance.

>
>"I'm not the one who's mad!" Rei replied in a tone of voice that prove
>the exact opposite.
>
>"Neither am I!" Minako added with the same tone of voice, they weren't
>even looking at each other.

Usagi: Okay, okay, we know they aren't looking at each other. You don't
have to keep repeating it.

>
>"Why don't you join us shopping, Rei?" Ami asked her "It'll give both
>of you a chance to work things through."
>
>"Sorry." she said "Even if I wanted to join you girls and miss Aino
>here (pointing at Minako), I have to take care of my little cousin, I
>couldn't find a baby-sitter."
>
>"Your aunt should've left his kid with the wolves," Minako replied
>"They would've done a better job of taking care of him than you!"

Hikaru: Actually, that would be true.
Usagi: Oh yeah? Then I suppose your pet takes care of you?

>
>"Who asked you??" Rei told her in a more menacing voice.
>
>"Come on girls, stop that." Makoto insisted "It's not like you two to
>be so mad at each other."

Ranma: Actually, it's quite in character.

>
>"I'm willing to forgive miss Aino only if she gives me a formal apology
>for what she said to me yesterday." Rei replied.
>
>"Well you can tell miss Hino that I won't say 'I'm sorry' until she
>does first." Minako declared. Both of them once again turned their back
>on each other.

Ranma: I don't get this. Why would Minako be willing to apologize even
if Rei did so first if she's this mad?

>
>"Humph!" was Rei's only answer as she once again decided to ignore her. 
>Minako did the same thing. 
>
>The rest of the girls were still trying to solve this little problem
>until Ami noticed something.
>
>"By the way," she said "where is Trunks?" 

Cloud: In luggage compartment.

>
>Everyone looked around noticing that Trunks didn't came back after
>leaving the packages. The five of them headed inside the temple and saw
>him joyfully playing with a little baby. The boy was pulling Trunks'
>hair as he giggled. Trunks held him and gently pock him in the stomach

Cloud: "Poke" misspelled.

>causing him to laugh even more (It was one of those Kodak moments).

Hikaru: (smiles) Oh, how sweet.
Ranma: Now this is more like Trunks.
Cloud: Blech.

>
>"Hey, Rei!" he said to her "Who is this little boy?"
>
>"He's Tetsuo," she told him as she finally smiled "he's my little
>cousin, he's here for the weekend."
>
>"Oh he's so *cute*!!!!" Usagi stated as she went to him and took him in
>her arms. The baby began to cry the moment she held him.

Hikaru: HAHAHAHA!
Usagi: Just you wait till I get back the crystal!

>
>"Here, let me hold him." Makoto insisted "Maybe you're scaring him."
>
>The baby continued to cry even if Makoto carried him. Everyone tried to
>calm him down by turns but the little boy didn't stop crying. He even
>cried when Rei held him.
>
>"Here, give him to me." Trunks said to Rei who was the last one in
>holding him. Tetsuo stopped crying when Trunks held him once again. He
>grabbed his purple hair with one hand and began to suck the thumb from
>his other hand. The girls looked at both of them.

Cloud: I'm gonna need a barfbag at this rate.

>
>"You're actually good at this." Ami brought out "Have you done this
>before?"
>
>"Not really." he answered. They all went outside afterwards, Trunks
>still playing with Tetsuo.
>
>"So, Rei." Usagi began "Are you sure you don't want to come with us,
>there's this new shop that just opened and there's some really neat
>stuff." Trunks looked at her with a terrorized expression.
>
>[More shopping??] he thought [Don't these girls ever stop??]

Ranma: How do they have so much money anyway?

>
>"Sorry." she said "But I have to stay here and take care of my cousin."
>
>"I know!" Trunks interrupted "I can take care of him for the rest of
>the day if you want to. [It's better than going shopping again!!]"

Hikaru: Wow, that's a quick thinking.
Cloud: (Trunks voice) Besides, I always wanted to know what a baby liver
tastes like!
Goku: THAT'S SICK!
Ranma: DON'T YOU EVER LEARN TO SHUT UP!!
(Ranma fires Double Moko Takabisha at Cloud, joined by Hikaru who casts
Akai Inazuma. Cloud gets severely damaged, but once again cures
himself.)
Cloud: You are the ones that need to learn to give-*SPLAT*
(A buttery-popcorn-covered Cloud turns around to seea grinning Usagi
holding an empty popcorn bag.)
Ranma: Good job, Usagi!
Hikaru: (thinking) Darn! Should have thought of it sooner.
Usagi: (smug grin) How do you feel now, Popcorn Man?
Cloud: That's it, I'm NEVER going to give back your crummy crystal!
Usagi: WHAAAAT?!

>
>"Well... I don't know..." Rei told him "I wouldn't want to ruin the
>rest of your day being stuck with Tetsuo."
>
>"It's no problem at all." he insisted "I always wanted a baby brother,
>even if it's only for a day. [And besides, if I see another shop I'll
>go crazy!]"
>
>"Are you sure you're up to this?" Ami asked him "It may not be as
>simple as you think."

Cloud: (Ami voice) Cooking is not as simple as-
Everyone else: SHUT UP!!!

>
>"Don't worry. [I prefer taking my chances with him.]" he replied "You
>can pick him up at my place when you're done shopping. He won't be a
>trouble at all, isn't that right Tetsuo?"
>
>"Well, all right then." Rei said "I'll go get all the stuff you'll need
>for him."
>
>
>Moments later, all seven left the temple. Trunks was pushing Tetsuo on
>a little stroller while caring a bag with dippers, talcum powder, milk
>bottles and stuff like that. Minako and Rei were still turning their
>back on each other not saying a word. Makoto was walking next to Trunks
>with her arm wrapped around his (as usual).

Ranma: Hmm... Trunks is getting used to Makoto's attitude, isn't he?

>
>"You know guys..." Usagi told Makoto and Trunks "Watching both of you 
>together like that with Tetsuo makes you look like a married couple."
>
>Both of them stopped walking. Trunks took a look at Makoto and Tetsuo.
>Usagi was right, it was quite a picture. Makoto was smiling at that
>amusing remark from her friend. As a matter of fact everyone was
>smiling as they gazed upon the couple, except Trunks who was blushing.
>
>"Don't be ridiculous." he spoke trying to hide his nervousness.

Usagi: Aww, come on! Plant the picket lines and mow the grasses! Build
a family with Makochan!

>
>"Look at him. He's bluuuuushiiiiiing!" Usagi pointed out making fun of
>him.
>
>"I am *not* blushing!!" he stated "Didn't you girls had enough fun at
>my expenses after what happened at the Lingerie shop!"

Hikaru: Yes, stop it, you harridans!

>
>All the girls couldn't contained themselves from laughing. They very
>well knew that Trunks liked Makoto even if he didn't admitted that in
>public (or to himself for that matter). The girls knew that he was too
>shy to tell her directly, but they managed to accept that as part of
>Trunks' personality. Makoto looked at him. He really was cute with

Cloud: "S" needed after the apostrophe.

>Tetsuo at his side, he even resembled him a little. By the way he
>treated him he'll probably be an excelent father one of these days. 
>And then her daydream began...

Cloud: "Excellent" misspelled.

>
>She was dressed in elegant vestments, just like a princess, sitting in
>a vast field covered with flowers. A bird settled on her shoulder and
>she began to feed it with some seeds. 
>
>(Is this Walt Disney, or what?)

Cloud: Eww!
Usagi: How neat!
Ranma: Well, Makoto IS a princess of Jupiter...

>
>Someone approached her on a horse. It was Trunks dressed in a shining
>full plate and a red cape while riding a beautiful white horse. Makoto
>looked at him with big dreamy eyes, her lover extended his hand helping
>her to get on the steed. She sat right in front of him face to face,
>Trunks held her by the waist with one hand while holding the horse rein
>with the other. Makoto had her arms around his neck as the horse ran
>through the field. 
>There faces where inches apart from one another until Trunks kissed her 
>tenderly.
>
>"I love, Mako-chan." he said to her "I want to be with you till the end

Cloud: "You" missing?

>of time."
>
>"Oh, Trunks-kun..." she told him with stars in her eyes "I'm so
>happy..."

Usagi: This should come true one of these days.
Hikaru: Not a chance.

>
>"I'm sorry I took so long to notice it," he continued "I was an idiot
>for not understanding how you felt for me."

Ranma: Well, he IS really dense in this fanfic...

>
>"Don't say that." she gently spoke "You're here and that's the only
>thing that matters..."
>
>"I never want to leave you, Mako-chan" he affirmed "I want to start a
>life with you. I want you to be the mother of my children and live
>happily ever after."

Cloud: I'm getting nauseous...

>
>She looked deep into his eyes, she knew he was serious and that he
>would never abandon her. She started kissing him again as they still
>traveled through the endless field of flowers.
>
>"I want to be with you too," she said to him "and have beautiful
>children with you." he smiled at her and returned the kiss.

Cloud: Capitalization error.

>
>"There's something else I wanted to tell you." he declared.
>
>"What is it, my love?" she asked.

Ranma:(Trunks voice) This dream sequence is coming to the end.

>
>"LOOK OUT!!!" he shouted.
>
><WHAM!!>
>
>Makoto feel on her butt from the blow, she held her forehead in pain.

Cloud: "Fell", not "feel".
Hikaru: Bravo! Bravo!
Usagi: Boo! Boo!

>
>"Are you all right?" Ami asked her.
>
>"Didn't you see the STOP sign right in front of you?" Trunks told her
>"I told you to look out, didn't I?"
>
>"Wh... What?" she spoke. Usagi and Rei helped her up.
>
>"How couldn't you see that sign, Mako-chan?" Usagi asked her "Where
>were you looking?"

Hikaru: Her little delusional world.

>
>"I... I had my mind elsewhere." she explained a little embarrassed.
>
>
>A few blocks later, Trunks split up from the group towards his house.
>The girls went to another mall as they tried to reconcile Minako and
>Rei. After walking a couple of minutes, Trunks noticed that he started
>to enter the desolate part of town. Usually, there was no one from here
>to his house so he decided to have some fun.
>
>"Hey, Tetsuo?" he asked him jokingly "Can you keep a secret?" 

(Cloud opens his mouth, but finds himself being gagged.)
Hikaru: Don't even bother trying to make ANOTHER perverted comment!
Cloud: Mmmmpphh! (gets the gag off of his mouth) Sheesh.

>
>He grabbed the stroller with the baby in it an began to fly home. In a 
>matter of seconds they reached Trunks' place. Tetsuo really enjoyed the 
>flight as he didn't stopped giggling.

Cloud: "Stop" needs to be in present tense.
Ranma: What was he going to do if he got spotted? This is carelessly
OOC.

>
>"Welcome to my humble abode!" Trunks said as he opened the door
>reveling the incredible bachelor mess that his house was. It's been
>some time since Makoto last cleaned up, Trunks had time to *reorganize*
>his space. 

Ranma: (putting his hand over his eyes) There he goes, being OOC
again...

>
>He put Tetsuo on the sofa once he removed all the pizza boxes that hid
>it. Tetsuo extended his arms to his sides as if they were wings and
>started hopping frenetically on his sitting spot.
>
>"Voom voom!" he managed to say "Voom voom! Voom voom!"

Cloud: Translation: "Kill, kill!"
Usagi: Why can't you ever shut your mouth!?

>
>"What is it buddy?" Trunks asked him "You wanna fly again?"
>
>"Voom voom!" he insisted.
>
>"All right, all right!" he spoke as he took him "Just don't go and tell
>Rei you were flying or she'll call you a liar."
>
>Trunks began to levitate again putting Tetsuo at the level of his
>stomach as he held him by the waist. The baby had his arms extended as
>if he was a bird. 
>They began to fly around the house as Trunks made air plane noises.
>
>"Base to Tetsuo-1. Base to Tetsuo-1. Please answer. Over." Trunks said 
>"Tetsuo-1 here. Ready for action. Over...... Tetsuo-1 you must destroy
>the Red Ribbon's northern base. Do you copy? Over..... Tetsuo-1, I
>copy. I can see the base just in front of me. Ready to shoot. Over and
>out."

Ranma: Red Ribbon? Oh yeah... The military group that tried to take over
the world before being destroyed by Goku.
Usagi: This scene is so touchingly sweet... Well done.

>
>
>While both of the boys were playing, the five girls were shopping once
>again. The situation between Rei and Minako didn't improve one bit. To
>be more precise, each time one of them took interest in a particular
>item in display, the other didn't even bother in entering the shop. Rei
>was inside a store trying out a dress at this moment and therefore,
>Minako was outside ignoring her. 

Hikaru: Just like them to be so immature.
Usagi: Who are you to talk?
Hikaru: I DON'T fight with Umi or Fuu.

>
>She started to take a look around to distract herself from her bad
>mood. Her eyes spotted a toy store that Trunks saw earlier this morning
>where the NEW Super Saya-man doll >>>with sword included<<< was on
>sale. She looked at the doll and sighed.
>
>[He's really a babe.] she thought, and so began her day dream...

Cloud: "Daydream" is one word.

>
>She pictured herself in a place filled with sparkling multi-colored
>lights. She was dressed in her Sailor Venus outfit as she heard someone
>approaching. When she turned around, she saw Super Saiya-man flying
>towards her with a beautiful smile on his face (teethes shining and
>everything).

Ranma: Try out the new "Teeth Shiner" by Capsule Corp. Chemistry
Division! Score your girlfriend with a good oral hygenie!

>
>"Super Saiya-man!!" she happily declared.
>
>Her beloved super hero gently took her between his arms and lifted her 
>towards the heavens. Minako saw angels flying, bells ringing and cherry 
>blossom petals falling upon her.

Cloud: Excuse me...
Goku: Where are you going?
Cloud: To throw up. (leaves for the bathroom)
Hikaru: I suppose I should take over his part.

>
>"You came back." she finally said as she rested her head on his chest
>"Even after what happened yesterday..."
>
>"It'll take more than *her* to drive me away from you, my dearest
>girl..." he interrupted.
>
>"I'm so happy you came..." she told him "I couldn't stop thinking about
>you, and I wanted to apologize for what Sailor Mars said."
>
>"You have nothing to explain." he stated "I'm here because I couldn't
>take you out of my mind either."
>
>"Do you love me?" She asked hopefully.
>
>"More than anything in the world." he stated. Minako started to blush
>as he told her that.
>
>"You do??" she asked cheerfully "Then... could you take off your
>mask... for me?"
>

Ranma: Who do you think she will imagine him to be?
Usagi: I don't think this daydream sequence will last that long.

>"For you... I'll do anything to make you happy." he declared "But could
>you answer me a question before that?"
>
>"Anything for you." she told him "What do you want to know?"

Ranma: And the dream sequence ends...

>
>"Could you please tell me the way to Furinkan high?" Super Saiya-man
>asked her with a different voice.

(Ranma rolls out of his chair.)
Ranma: (getting up) That voice... That phrase!
Hikaru: A cameo appearence?

>
>"What?" Minako asked surprised as she snapped out of her daydream.
>
>"The way to Furinkan high..." said the teenager with a yellow shirt who
>carried a rather big backpack with a red umbrella tied to it. He wore a 
>yellow and black bandanna on his head and gave the impression to be
>totally lost. "Could you give me some directions?"

Ranma: Yup, no doubt about it, he's Ryoga. Geez, I don't get any cameo
appearence but Ryoga does? (growls)

>
>"Hun... That's in Nerima district, isn't it?" Minako pointed out once
>her brain switched from dream to reality "If you're looking for the
>train station you have to get out of the mall, walk down the main road
>for two blocks, then turn right and walk till you see a traffic light,
>then turn left and follow the road. You can't miss it."
>
>"Er... right, thanks..." the boy said to her not very sure if he
>understood. He then left her, searching his way out of the mall.

Ranma: As a side note, Ryoga DOES understand instructions, he just can't
follow it.

>
>"Hey, Minako." Usagi asked her once she joined her "Who was that cute
>boy you were talking to?"

Ranma: Cute?!
Usagi: Hey, don't look at me like that!
Ranma: Yeah, yeah...

>
>"Just some guy who wanted to know the way to Furinkan high." she
>responded "Isn't Mamoru giving classes there?"
>
>"Yeah, he is." Usagi affirmed "Talk about coincidence."
>

Ranma: It's called a cameo appearence.

>
>Moments later, back to Trunks' place. The Sayan hybrid was dealing with
>the difficult part of baby-sitting. Tetsuo had a little *accident* and
>Trunks had to change dippers. He practically was wrestling Tetsuo in
>order to getting him changed.

(Cloud returns.)
Cloud: Why, I never knew Trunks's taste ran that way.
Usagi: *SIGH* Trust you to make a dirty comment the second you're
back...

>
>"Stop moving will you." He told him trying to remove the dirty dippers

Cloud: "Diapers" misspelled.

>"Aww man! What a mess. Let's see where Rei put the spare dippers."
>
>
>Trunks took the talcum bottle and began to apply some of it on Tetsuo's
>butt after going through the disgusting "cleaning" part of the job. 
>The bottle cap suddenly went lose and the talcum was poured all over
>the house.
>
>"Great!" he said blaming himself "This is the last thing I needed now!"

Usagi: On what ground is he blaming himself? He sure doesn't sound like
it.

>
>After cleaning the mess the best he could, Trunks finally managed to
>hold the baby still and poured what was left in the bottle. The hard
>part was over (or so he thought). Trunks lifted him to inspect if he
>was completely clean. That proved to be a big mistake as the baby peed
>on his jacket the moment he had him at range (of course he didn't avoid
>that! It's not an attack that requires ki, he couldn't have detected
>it!).

Cloud: HAAAAHAAAHAAAHAAAHAAA!!!
Ranma: It's all part of being a parent.
Goku: (nods) I did the same thing with Gohan.

>
>"Hey!!!" he said as he moved him away "That's my favorite jacket!!" as
>he took it off and threw it into the washing machine.
>
>"Okay!" he declared "No more mister nice guy! I'm going to put you in
>that dipper even if it kills me!!! [I can't believe I'm being beat up

Cloud: "Diaper" misspelled again.

>by a boy who can barely walk!]"
>
>After dealing a couple of minutes with the unrestrainable little
>Tetsuo, Trunks managed to change him into clean dippers. He then

Cloud: "Diaper" you-know-what.

>proceeded in feeding the child with one of the milk bottles Rei
>prepared. Tetsuo was definitively a lot more cooperative when it came
>to eating. Trunks held him on his lap while the baby sucked the bottle
>dry. 
>
>In spite of the previous challenge with the dippers, he had to admit he
>was actually having a good time taking care of Rei's little cousin, he
>only wished his father lived long enough to give him a brother or
>sister to fill the hole he left behind.

Ranma: Go visit your alternative universe then. You have a younger
sister there.

>Once Tetsuo finished gulping the rest of the milk, Trunks took him to
>the sofa and turned on the T.V. 
>
>"So what do you say, kiddo?" he asked him "Feel like watching T.V.?"
>
>Trunks began changing channels searching for something interesting to
>watch. Unfortunately, Tetsuo had different preferences than his, and
>therefore, each time Trunks chose a certain channel that Tetsuo didn't
>like he made his disapproval quite clear by crying. 
>As a result, in order to keep him happy, Trunks ended up watching some 
>stupid show about a purple dinosaur who was singing nonsense about him 
>loving everybody and everybody loving him (?). The show was so boring

Cloud: ACK! The horror! The horror!
Ranma: Kill that dinosaur!
Usagi: In the name of moon, you shall be punished for being so stupid!
Hikaru: Even that mud monster I fought in Precia's manor was cuter than
this!
Goku: (singing happily) I love you, you love me, we are happy family...
Cloud: OMNISLASH!! *SLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASH
SLASHSLASHSLASHSLASHSLASH*
Ranma: Kachu Tenshin Amaguriken! *POWBLAMWHACKCRASHBONK*
Hikaru: Hikari! *SCHOOOOOOOOOOOORRRCH*
Goku: Uhhh... (falls unconscious)
Usagi: (shudders) Who would have thought he had such a bad taste?

>that Trunks began to fall asleep on the sofa. Tetsuo didn't took long
>to do the same and snuggled up at his side.

Cloud: "Take" needs to be in present form.

>
>
>As time went on, the "female five" finished there shopping and headed
>towards Trunks' house. In spite of all their efforts, Usagi, Makoto and
>Ami were unable to appease the situation between Minako and Rei. The
>more they tried to solve the problem the more it seemed to worsen
>things. Both of them had really big egos and would never apologize
>unless the other one did first, and of course, none of them did that.

Cloud: Replace "none" with "neither".

>
>"It's so nice of Trunks to take care of Tetsuo." Rei told Makoto trying
>to open a conversation "They really seem to get along fine with each
>other; Tetsuo isn't usually so cheerful around strangers."
>
>"Sure seems that way." Makoto replied proudly.
>
>"You're so lucky for finding a guy like that, Mako-chan" Usagi added.
>Her tall friend only smiled to that remark.

Cloud: Punctuation error.

>
>"I wonder why he was so eager to take care of him." Minako brought out
>"I would of thought he'd rather spend the day shopping with us."

Hikaru: Yeah right.
Usagi: Hmph.

>
>"Well," Makoto began "maybe it's because he's an only son and the fact
>that he lost his father when he was too young to remember."

Ranma: A reasonable deduction that makes this plot very convincing.

>
>"I see," Ami stated "he must be developing a paternalistic instinct to
>compensate for his grievous childhood."
>
>"Since when did you became such an expert psychologist, Ami?" Usagi
>teased her.

Usagi: I don't see how that is a tease.

>
>"Is this the place Mako-chan?" Rei asked her pointing at the weird
>spherical house with the number 6 and the words "Capsule Corp" written
>over it.
>
>"Yhea, this is it." she stated.

Cloud: "Yeah" misspelled.

>
>"Weird looking place." Minako declared.
>

Ranma: Well, it's not every day you see a dome-shaped house.

>
>The door was open, so they didn't bother to knock and went right
>inside. The place was a real mess as the surprised girls traveled their
>eyes around the room to emphasize that. 
>Makoto couldn't believe it. 
>How could Trunks make such a mess after she *personaly* cleaned up the
>place?

Ranma: Yeah, how could Trunks be so OOC?
Cloud: You have made your point enough already, stop nitpicking.

>
>"Did Trunks' wardrobe exploded?..." Minako asked to no one in

Cloud: Add "s" after the apostrophe.

>particular noticing the scattered clothes all over the room "Or is it
>usually this messy?"
>
>"It's... usually this messy..." Makoto responded not as proud as
>before.

Ranma: Somehow, I really doubt that.

>
>"Hey, I think something is moving over there." Ami declared pointing 
>somewhere near the T.V.
>
>The girls went to the sofa avoiding to step on the big variety of stuff 
>Trunks had all over his floor. Once they reached the sofa, they saw
>Tetsuo and the purple hair boy deeply asleep on the furniture. The baby
>was sucking one of his own thumbs while holding some of Trunks' hair
>with the other hand. 
>Trunks was holding Tetsuo in his arms as if he was a teddy bear (Yes,
>this was another Kodak moment). All the girls smiled at the pretty
>picture.

Cloud: Ick.
Hikaru: Well, it is cute.

>
>"Oooooooh! Both of them look so *cute* like that!" Usagi spoke in a low
>tone of voice trying not to wake them up.
>
>"Does anybody have a camera?" Minako asked.
>
>"He actually does look kinda cute when he's not snoring." Ami stated,
>she was after all the one that saw him (or herd him) asleep during
>class most of the time.

Cloud: "Heard" misspelled.

>
>"Should we wake them up?" Rei asked. 
>
>"They look so peaceful." Makoto said "Maybe we should wait."

(Goku stirs.)
Goku: Uhhh... That wasn't nice, you all.
Cloud: Next time, it's gonna be a Knights of Round.
Ranma: Or better yet, a nyanniichuan water. (evil grin)
Goku: (pales) Okay, okay...

>
>"What are we suppose to do in the meantime?" Usagi asked. 

Cloud: "Suppose" needs to be in past tense.

>
>"How about if we clean up this mess." Ami suggested "It's the least we
>could do to thank him for taking care of Tetsuo."
>
>The girls started cleaning up the place as silently as they could
>trying not to wake the two boys.
>
>
>
>He was holding her between his arm while both of them stood in the
>middle of the hall. It felt nice having her near him, her hands were
>around his neck while he held her from her waist.
>
>"If it makes you feel any better," she began "I promise you I won't let 
>myself get killed."
>
>He smiled at her. She was so sweet and caring, he couldn't remember
>having a happier moment in his life. He saw her face approaching his as
>she kissed him.

Ranma: Hey, isn't this from the last chapter?
Hikaru: It's a flashback scene... or maybe another dream sequence.

>
>"What a touching scene." a voice full with sarcasm said behind him.
>
>Trunks immediately turned around. He knew that voice very well and he
>didn't liked it. #17 stood there laying against the wall. How on Earth

Cloud: "Like" needs to be in present tense.

>did he get here? He didn't have time to think about that. He had to
>face him now.

Goku: Sadly, Trunks at this time is outclassed by the androids. The best
he can hope for is to buy some time.

>
>"So do you really think you can save her from dying?" he asked
>mockingly "Unlike your friend Gohan?"
>
>"Trunks-kun!!!" she shouted. 
>
>Trunks turned towards where Makoto stood only to see that she wasn't
>there now. Where was she? He heard her scream his name again, it came
>from below. 
>
>They weren't indoors anymore, the ground turned blue and wet, they were
>in the middle of the ocean. #17 and him were levitating. There was
>something underneath him, it was a whirlpool, and Makoto was caught in
>it. Trunks tried to reach her but two pair of arms held him still. It
>was #17 and #18... no... wait that wasn't #18! That was Ami! But she
>was dressed like #18 and was LEVITATING!!
>

Ranma: What the...?
Cloud: I have a GOOD feeling about this.
Usagi: And that means bad for us.

>
>The girls began to hear Trunks mumbling something during his sleep. All
>of them dropped what they were doing and gathered around him trying to
>figure out what he was dreaming about. Who knows? Maybe it was
>something about Mako-chan? (At least that was what most of them
>expected/hoped/supposed). 

Hikaru: You wish.

>Trunks wasn't really a very *open* guy, he never said how he felt and
>this moment could be interesting in knowing his true feelings. 

Cloud: Well, being a time-traveler doesn't allow for much liberty of
speech...

>
>".... Ami....let go of me!...." muttered Trunks as he swung his head
>from side to side.

Cloud: (grins) Oh yeeess.
Ranma: *SIGH* Another humiliation for Trunks coming up.

>
>Everybody glared at Ami, especially Makoto. Why was Trunks dreaming
>about her? And what *were* they doing in that dream? Why wouldn't she
>let go of him?

Cloud: Well, should I spell it out?
Usagi: (holding a giant mallet) Don't even think about it!

>Ami blushed as she nervously noticed that her friends were staring at
>her. She was just as surprised as everyone, she didn't do anything
>wrong! But how could she convince them that she was innocent, Trunks
>put her in a very difficult situation.

Usagi: There's that needless sentence again... The prose would flow much
smoother if it was omitted.

>
>"Ami... Is there something you haven't told us between you and Trunks?" 
>Usagi asked distrustfully.
>
>"I... I haven't done anything." she tried to explained, although her
>friends didn't look very convinced "Really!"

Ranma: They should know better than to doubt her. Ami is acting a little
OOC in this fic.

>
>
>Meanwhile, back in Trunks' dream. 
>He struggled to get himself free, but he couldn't. What was wrong with
>him? Why couldn't he turn Super Saiyan?

Goku: Even if he did, it won't do much good.

>The twins held him as they laugh perversely. He couldn't do anything.
>Just watch as Makoto desperately tried to swim to safety. She was
>drowning *slowly*, almost as if the current made it that way to cause
>Trunks more suffering. He could still hear her call out his name in
>despair. He couldn't bear it.

Usagi: *SNIFF* Oh, how romantic...
Hikaru: Please.

>
>The girls saw how Trunks was starting to become more agitated. His
>facial expressions showed that he was in extreme discomfort. Rei took
>the precaution of taking a hold of Tetsuo before Trunks accidentally
>hurt him. 
>The rest of them weren't so sure of what to do next, until Trunks woke
>up with a big scream. Makoto was the first one to approach him to see
>if he was okay. 
>
>"Trunks-kun! Are you all right?" she asked worried "Calm down, it was
>just a nightmare!"
>
>Trunks took a look around to situate himself, he was back at his place
>and his five friends were facing him with concerned looks on each one.
>His hands could feel the sweat as he passed them over his face. He was
>also breathing very fast. He slowly stood up.
>
>"I have to go to the bathroom." he said as he began to walk away.
>
>After washing off his face he stepped inside the room once again, his 
>friends were still looking at him as if they were expecting an answer.
>He didn't say a word however, until Makoto made the obvious question.
>
>"What was that all about, Trunks-kun?" she asked. 

Ranma: How is he going to get out of this one?

>
>"Just a nightmare." he answered simply.

Usagi: That won't be any good. We would want to know more than that.

>
>"It surely seemed to be more than just a nightmare." Usagi said "Care
>to tell us about it?"
>
>"It was nothing really." he declared. 
>
>Makoto, Minako, Usagi and Rei stared at him with a very suspicious look
>in their eyes. Then the four turned towards Ami giving her that same
>look. Usagi was the first to make a comment.
>
>"You yelled Ami's name during your sleep." she pointed out "What was
>that all about?"

Cloud: He was simply crying out in tortured desire as Ami mercilessly
teased him and never allowed him to-
(Usagi bashes him with her mallet.)

>
>"Well," Trunks explained "she was in my nightmare."
>
>"What were you two doing in that dream of yours?" Makoto asked, she
>seamed to be the most disturbed one between the girls.
>
>"What do you mean by that? Nothing happened." he said obviously not
>getting the message "What were you thinking we were d......(brain gets
>the idea now)... AW MAN!!! YOU GIRLS ARE SICK!!!"

Ranma: Funny, he's suddenly not so oblivious anymore.

>
>"Well?" Rei asked still not convinced.
>
>"No!" he answered rather offended "There was nothing sexual and/or
>romantic going between us! I can assure you that!"

Cloud: Hmm, he's better at lying than I thought.
Hikaru: How can you say that? What would he want to do with that nerdy
slut anyway?
Usagi: At least it will be better than a nerdy slut with glasses!
Ranma: Um, Usagi, Ami DOES wear glasses sometimes,
remember?
(Usagi sweatdrops while Hikaru smirks.)

>
>"Then what was she doing in your dream?" Usagi added.
>
>"She...er... had me tied up in a chair and was forcing me to study to
>death." he lied not wanting to tell them that she actually helped in
>killing Makoto.

Ranma: (whistles) Wow, he came up with a great excuse for once.

>
>"Oh." said the four girls, they seemed satisfied with that answer. 
>
>It seemed quite a logical answer also, especially knowing that Ami was
>one tuff tutor. Everyone regain their previous behavior before that

Cloud: "Tough" misspelled, and "regain" needs to be in past tense.

>little misunderstanding went off, except for Ami that is. Her face was
>as red as a traffic light, one couldn't tell if it was from shame or
>anger, although she didn't say a thing. 
>Trunks suddenly had this disturbing feeling, something wasn't right. He
>took a look around and noticed that all of his clothes (*not* the ones
>he had on! You dirty minded person you!) weren't where he last left

Cloud: Oh, drat.
Hikaru: I wouldn't put it past them.
Usagi: We aren't THAT perverted!

>them. He didn't see that pair of pants he always threw over the couch,
>or the shirt that usually was on top of the T.V, neither the extra
>underwear he always put on the magazine rack. That between other lots
>of things. Where did his stuff go?

Usagi: It took him this long to realized this? Geeze...

>
>"We cleaned up while you were asleep." Ami told him as she noticed his 
>confused expression "Isn't it a lot cleaner?"
>
>"Er... yeah, it sure is..." Trunks responded "But....... where's all my 
>stuff now?"
>

Ranma: An alternate form of Hibiki syndrome; where the victim of
aforementioned can't find his way, the victim of this new syndrome
cannot find his belongings.

>
>After some time, everyone was doing something. Ami was helping Trunks
>to find all of his clothes, Usagi and Makoto were in one of the
>bathrooms trying to change Tetsuo who just had another *accident*,
>while Minako and Rei were left alone in the living room while still
>turning their back on each other and not saying a word. Trunks finally
>came out of his room and saw the two of them in their *I'm not talking
>to you!* attitude. He approached them.
>
>"Hey girls, is there something wrong?" he asked.

Usagi: Well duh, no-ACK!
Cloud: (removing his sword) I don't make empty threats.
Ranma: Neither do I, Strife! (hits Cloud with a moonsault kick)
Cloud: Why you punk!
Goku: STOP IT!!
(Ranma and Cloud VERY reluctantly stop. Goku sighs.)

>
>"Everything is fine with me, thank you." Minako said in an indifferent
>tone of voice.
>
>"Same here!" Rei added in the same tone of voice.
>
>"Why aren't you talking to each other?" 
>
>"I'm not talking to miss Aino until she says 'I'm sorry'!" Rei
>explained still looking away from her.
>
>"Trunks, could you please tell miss Hino that I won't apologize until
>she does first." she stated.

Ranma: I still don't get this reasoning...

>
>"Well... could you fill me in on what made both of you get angry at
>each other?" he asked.
>
>Both of them looked a little uncomfortable, they didn't want to tell
>him about Super Saiya-man. How could they explain they knew him without
>revealing to Trunks their identity. They had to do this carefully.

Cloud: Punctuation error.

>
>"Miss Hino made quite a good job in scaring away a boy I had my eye
>on." Minako answered, trying to be as brief as possible.

Ranma: Scaring away? Rei was the one who got scared at Trunks's
presence.
Usagi: Ranma, you shouldn't nitpick so much.
Ranma: (shrugs) I like doing it.

>
>"That guy is dangerous, we don't know a thing about him and you're
>throwing yourself to him just because he's good looking!" Rei stated.
>
>"You can't even prove that!" Minako declared "The only thing you have
>is your 'hunch'!"

Ranma: Actually, Rei's hunch is pretty accurate. Not always, but
usually.

>
>"A boy?" asked Trunks "All of this is because of some guy you barely
>know?"
>
>Both of the girls looked at him. No one actually ever told them how
>stupid this quarrel was, and all because of a boy. Both tried to
>explain the problem as swiftly as possible.

Usagi: Hey, it's not stupid!

>
>"Well, it's not just any boy." Minako pointed out "He's become very 
>important in our... er... daily life."
>
>"Even if he turned out to be the coolest thing that ever walked on
>earth, I'm sure that he's not worth that you two never speaking to each
>other again." Trunks said to them "You girls are good friends, you
>should be able to solve this, shouldn't you?"
>
>"Good friends don't insult each other." Rei brought out as she turned
>her back on her again. Minako didn't take long to do the same thing.
>
>"I'm sure neither of you meant what you said to each other." Trunks
>told them.
>
>"After what she said to me... I think this is a friendship I can well
>do without!" Minako replied.
>
>"The same goes for me!" Rei added.

Usagi: Nice dialogues so far...

>
>Trunks sighed, this was turning to be more difficult than he thought.
>He wished he didn't had to do what he was about to do.
>
>"Minako, Rei..." he began "Have you ever wondered how many friends I
>have?" 
>
>Both looked at him confused. What did that had to do with what they 
>were talking about? 
>Trunks held his hand in front of them showing all five of his fingers.
>
>"Five... Five friends." he continued "Mako-chan, Ami, Usagi and both of
>you. It's actually six if you count Tetsuo. Have you ever wondered why
>I only have you guys?"
>
>"Well... now that you mention it..." Minako started.
>
>"Well it's quite simple." Trunks interrupted her "All of my other
>friends were murdered... All of them. And I couldn't do a thing to save
>them. I see Mako-chan didn't tell you about that, did she?"
>
>The two girls looked surprised not to mention sad for him. Makoto never
>told them about that. Both of them moved their heads from side to side
>as a response for Trunks' question.

Cloud: "S" needed after the apostrophe.

>
>"We... we're sorry..." Rei told him "We didn't knew that..."
>
>"You don't have to feel sorry." he interrupted again "The point is that 
>when they died, I was completely destroyed. Now tell me Rei... How
>would you feel if suddenly Minako died. And you Minako... How would you
>feel if something happened to Rei."
>
>Both of them remained silent for a moment, Minako was the first one who 
>spoke.
>
>"I guess I'd be feeling like you did." She responded sadly.
>
>"Yeah, me too." Rei added in a low voice.
>
>"Friendship shouldn't be taken for granted you know." Trunks declared
>"And as for that boy who seems to be the trouble of all this... Well I
>think that's something both of you will have to work out."

Ranma: (nods) Now this is more like Trunks.

>
>A long pause followed, the girls were looking at each other again.
>Judging from their faces they felt guilty and stupid for what's been
>happening this day.
>
>"Trunks... could you please give us some time alone?" Minako asked him
>"I think we both need to talk things out."
>
>"Sure thing." he responded as he smiled, he then turned towards one of
>the walls "You can come out now, girls. The show is over."
>
>Three surprised voices were herd behind the wall. Into the room came
>Makoto, Usagi and Ami looking a little embarrassed for being caught in
>the act. 
>
>[I hate it when he does that.] Makoto thought, although she couldn't
>hide her smile. The four of them left inside another room. Once they
>were left alone, Minako was the first to talk.
>
>"I'm sorry, Rei." she said "I really am, I shouldn't have said all
>those horrible things to you."
>
>"No, I'm the one who should be sorry." Rei replied "You were right. I 
>shouldn't be such a grouch all the time. Can you forgive me."
>
>"Only if you forgive too." Minako declared, they gave each other a big
>hug "So what are we going to do about *him*?"
>
>"About Super Saiya-man?" Rei asked "Well I for one can cut him some
>slack, until we know for sure who he is and what he wants."
>
>"Then you won't mind if I... you know." she told her.
>
>"Don't worry." Rei stated "I won't stand in your way. He's all yours."
>

Ranma: So Minako has been afraid that Rei will try to steal him away?
Well, all of the girls are attracted to Trunks to some degree in this
fic...
Cloud: I don't like the way Trunks solved their problem so easily and
quickly...
Hikaru: What do you expect? He's the hero of this series.

>
>Meanwhile, in another room of the house. Makoto, Usagi, Ami, Trunks and 
>Tetsuo were sitting on a bed while talking.
>
>"I think you handled that quite well, Trunks." Ami said to him "Good
>job."
>
>"It was nothing really." he replied as he continued to play with the
>baby. 
>
>Makoto snuggled next to Trunks and put her arms around his waist. 
>
>"You're too modest, you know?" she told him.

Ranma: It's just that Trunks doesn't have much confidence in himself.
Having enough power to destroy the earth but being unable to save it
will do that to you.

>
>Ami and Usagi saw that Trunks wasn't complaining, he even looked happy
>that Makoto held him. His arm moved behind her back and grabbed her
>shoulder. This time Makoto was the one surprised, Trunks didn't say a
>thing though, he kept on playing with Tetsuo who was sitting on his
>lap, he still held her however. 
>He didn't knew how to express it but he deeply cared for Makoto, more
>than just a friend that was certain. For the first time, Usagi

Hikaru: Oh no... Trunks, you are making a BIG mistake!
Usagi: That's the way, Trunks!

>contained herself from making any slight remarks.
>
>"I think we can go outside now." Ami suggested.
>
>The four of them left the room. Makoto still had an arm around Trunks'
>waist while he held her shoulder, he was holding Tetsuo in the other
>hand (now they really looked like a married couple). 
>
>"Well I guess we'll be going now." Rei brought out "Thanks for
>everything, Trunks."
>
>"My pleasure." He said to her "If you ever need someone to take care of 
>Tetsuo you can always count on me."

Cloud: And next time, I will need more salt and-
Everyone else: SHUT UP I SAID!!
Cloud: Okay, okay.

>
>Everyone started leaving. Makoto was the last one to say good-bye.
>
>"I'll be seeing you at school tomorrow, okay?" she told him.
>
>"Til tomorrow then." he responded.
>
>They stood there for a moment without saying a word, they were just
>staring at each other. Trunks took a good look at her. She was really
>beautiful, he was surprised he didn't noticed that before. But somehow
>he felt something different for her than his other friends. A feeling
>he didn't quite understood.
>He snapped out of his trance figuring that Mako-chan would certainly be 
>asking herself why was he staring at her. He didn't want to look like
>an idiot.

Usagi: Oh come on...
Ranma: I really don't think Trunks will be this dense about love.
Goku: And isn't he supposed to be giving me the medicine already? That
dream should have reminded him of it.

>
>"Er... the others are waiting for you." he declared, pointing out to
>the girls. 
>
>"Er... right! Well, bye now!" she said [For a moment there I would've
>sworn he was going to kiss me!].
>
>His five friends began to walk away, Trunks stood by the door until
>they dropped out of sight. He then closed the door and went to bed.
>
>
>
>
>End of chapter 7.
>-----------------------------------------------------------------------
>---------------------------

Usagi: That must have been our longest review yet. Well, there's the
usual grammar and spelling mistakes, as well as OOC behaviors, but they
are negligible since the plot and character interactions are very good.
This fanfic is getting better with each chapter! I'm looking forward to
the next one.

>
>Author's notes:
>
><Phew!> That was a long one! Right now my eyes are begging me to stop 
>writing and my head is killing me......... BUT I DON'T CARE!!! I must
>keep on going! I don't want this to be one of those unfinished fanfics
>I always run by at the net, but just give me some time to recover
>(pleeeeeaaaase!).

Hikaru: Oh, it's the Fanficitus syndrome.

>And by the way, Ryouga Hibiki (Who showed up in this fanfic if you
>didn't realized it) is a character of Ranma 1/2 and rightfully belongs
>to Rumiko Takahashi, I never claimed him to be my creation so don't sue
>me!

Usagi: One disclaimer in a fanfic is enough. You don't need to state it
again.

>
>
>See you in chapter 8...

	Usagi blinked. "Wow, the next one is the last chapter!"
	"I REALLY hope Trunks will save himself and ditch that tall
bimbo." Hikaru said, earning a glare from Usagi.
	"Well, we have been here for a long time." Ranma said. "Do you
think Trunks will end up with Makoto?"
	"Of course! How could he not?" Usagi exclaimed.
	"I don't think the author is cruel enough to separate them by
now." Goku agreed.
	"Amateurs." Cloud snorted. "The so-called-tragic ending is
obviously the choice."
	"For once I agree with this pervert." Hikaru said.
	"Well, I can't really decide..." Ranma once again displayed his
indecisiveness. "But I do hope they get together." Seeing Hikaru stare
at him, Ranma defended, "Hey, those girls aren't as bad as you think,
Hikaru."
	Hikaru sighed. "Someday, you will regret thinking that way."
	"Well, the answer is in the next chapter." Goku closed his eyes.
"I think I will get some nap before it."

			Concluded in part 8 of 8



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